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Amber Joy by Danijel-Knez Amber Joy by Danijel-Knez
A3 paper. Equipment used: HB,4H Pencil,mechanical pencil. Faber-Castell yellow and Stabilo yellow ink.
Time to complete: 15 hours.

''See into the tree of joy''

At the heart of it all, when i was all alone.
When my hope would fall,and my heart turned to stone.
when nothing could breach this wall,nothing i could condone.

You came into my life, with the hugs that i wanted.
Even if it comes with a price,i did not feel all so darkened.
Nothing i could say would suffice, i wanted to act guarded.

We kissed and hugged, no emotions between us.
I only wanted to be loved,but that would only make a fuss.
There was only lust,and nothing more to discuss.

We were just two souls,looking for company.
Only to fill those dark empty holes,its good that we found each other luckily.
Now when time slows,its all gone so suddenly.

Everything will be fine, whatever i wished to dignify.
So it passes this summertime,and i only wanted to clarify.
That we had a good time,We parted ways and said goodbye…
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:iconhisptermon:
hisptermon Apr 8, 2014  New member
Artist !
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:icondanijel-knez:
Danijel-Knez Apr 8, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:bow:
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hisptermon Apr 8, 2014  New member
Wink/Razz 
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crazyruthie Mar 4, 2014   General Artist
these lines of the poem is really well done
"I only wanted to be loved,but that would only make a fuss.
There was only lust,and nothing more to discuss."

a little constructive criticsm, the line
"only to fill those dark, empty holes, it's good that we found each other luckily." <---- i changed some punctuation problems. ]
this part
"it's good that we found each other luckily" the line is a bit award and redundant. i would cut this part out entirely and leave the line as "only to fill those dark empty holes."it fits the meter better that way, and makes it fit with the other lines better. 

for the  drawing... it's outstanding! creative and dramatic. :D
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Danijel-Knez Mar 5, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I have to say.. I took me quite some time to reply to you. 
What i wanted to say was, even though it is wrong and it does not fit. I cannot change it now, since it is here for such a long time. I don't want the rhyme to go away with the ''holes'' , instead i would like it to stay on ''luckily'' since holes, wouldn't rhyme with the next part ''suddenly''. My English is still in study and I have much to learn, I stay away from poetry just for this reason, since I can't truly express myself in my native tongue, I often find more expression in English dialect of words.

I don't understand on award? Award is when somebody gets something when he/she wins ? Redundant, yes. I understand it does not fit, and I had trouble finding the correct word to end it all. But as I said, after all this time, i will not change it now. In many years later if things go as I would imagine, there will be a full check up on all the words that I have written on these. But for now... Yeah. 

In any case, thank you!
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SRicky1 Oct 7, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I actually really, really love this color. It's bright, eye-catching, and it's full of warmth and heat. The thing around the eye reminds me of a prison, and i do find that interesting. The bottom section shaped upwards like a volcano, and like I said, reminds me of heat. So it's kind of like a buildup of experiences until one sees a high point. In my eyes, at least.

But yeah, of course I love the design. And the touch of colors just adds so much to the piece. Lovely job, man.
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Danijel-Knez Oct 8, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
The you will like what comes next. Currently working on the next one. As with the rest it gets better with each new one, trying new and different styles. Once again you are right this is what i wanted to show, the emotion of building up but it fades away in the end, the prison is your own mind, trying to figure out. Everything that remains in the ends is shattered glass, even though you try to mend it.

Thank you!
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JasonStyx Oct 5, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Man, this one is an amazing I am a dummy! 
I love it!!! *Two super thumb rockets up in the sky*
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Danijel-Knez Oct 6, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Hah thanks friend!
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AimAxon Oct 4, 2013   Traditional Artist
Souls come together to kindle a fire.
Sometimes instant sparks that quickly fade.
Whether the fire burns forever or just for a moment…is the reminder of life ever wrong?

Beautifully intense. Happy about the Amber choice too ^.^
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